Because I did not good for my senior high test, my parents countenanced me going to the five years establish school. And my grades just can distributed me to chemical engineering departmentalism.
I graduated from the five years establish school, and I matriculate of NTUST.
And I will graduate June this year.
I attended three graduate school tests March this year, if I could not matriculate any school.
I will finish my military service for a first.
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I think you might set a topic sentance of your paragraph at first, which should be concerned about the topic certainly. Then, to make supports and conclusion of topic. In my opinion your paragraph has little bit far away the main meaning of topic.
Glad to read it. A9415035
We have the same problem on chinese thinking, for example, " my grades just can distributed me to chemical engineering departmentalism," I know what you want to say but it's just a little strange. Sorry! I have no idea how to say will be better about this sentence.
Here is my suggestion except chinese thinking, focuse on controlling idea and try to give more support.
也許你的原因只有因為考試分發的關係，但你可以說關於五專時你的主修，以及你怎麼選二技考試你要念的科系，或什麼原因影響你做這些決定，或許化工不是你的興趣，若可以選擇你原本想念的是什麼？以及為什麼之類的。
Hope my suggestions are helpful.
A9415058
I think maybe you can add a topic sentence to let reader know the main purpose. Then I feel a little bit short about this chapter. Maybe you can write more deeper and more detail . For example you feeling at that time or how you decided this way and so on.
Sean A9401010
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